GENERAL COMMENTS:
I advised you before you did your presentations not to have a lot of text in your slides (your audience will read it and not listen to what you are saying); not to read out the text on the screen (the audience is already reading it); and not to read your presentation from a script (it’s difficult to make it interesting). Some of you did all three of those things, however, so you got lower marks. When you make a presentation the information you want to communicate has to be in your head so that you can communicate with the audience, and the slides should be illustrations of what you are talking about, or give information visually that you aren’t giving orally.
So here are my comments and marks for each presentation. They are in the order you made your presentations, with the names of the companies rather than your own names, for reasons of discretion:
1 L’Oréal: “bio” in English is “organic”. You mispronounced the words “women”, “widely” and “environment” (among others). You didn’t explain about the FSC logo. There was too much text on the screen and you were reading a script which included words you didn’t seem to understand. You didn’t explain some of the information on the slides (e.g. “Global Strategy”, “Focus/Niche”) and gave us no criticism of the company. A company in English is “it” or “they”, not “she”. “Strategy of company’s image” is not English – you should say “Company image strategy”. 11/20
2 Printemps: “Company”, not “society”. You were mostly reading your text from the screen or a script. Don’t try to pronounce “Printemps” as if it’s an English word, it’s not! The second presenter was better in terms of using the slides. Some mistakes with the present perfect used about the past. A well-balanced presentation, but you needed more pictures and more criticism. Don’t use French inverted commas (guillemets) in a presentation in English. “Personnel” is a noun (meaning “staff”), not an adjective. 13/20
3 Easyjet: Some problems with pronunciation and vocabulary. Good opening – but was this a presentation or a promotion? The second presenter improvised, which was much better. “Particulary” doesn’t exist in English (a common mistake) and booking hotels is “hotel booking”. You commented on your slides (good) but gave little criticism. Did you say that Easyjet flies into Euston? “30,05€” is not English, you should write “€30.05”. “Travel” is uncountable, you should say “a trip” or “a journey”. You said Easyjet didn’t use advertising and then showed us an ad! 14/20
4 Body Shop: “Dame” is not part of Anita Roddick’s name, it’s an honorary title (and it’s not pronounced “dah-may”!) You mentioned “his husband”, it should be “her”. Your images were good, but you were reading from the slides and a script. Some of your slides referred to the company as “we”, which suggests a lack of critical distance. Mispronunciations: “biodegradable”, “pioneer”, etc. Responsible “for”, not “of”. You made some good criticisms, but some of your text was clearly not your own, e.g. “failed to deliver on its commitments”. 13/20
5 A&F: Slides with no text were a good idea, but a bit distracting. You were reading your text, some of which didn’t sound like your own words, e.g. “none of them has ever actually surfaced…” You made some good criticisms. More commentary on the images you showed would have helped (e.g. why were there only two girls among all those men?). The current director (not “actual”). Mispronunciation: “anorexia” (sounded like “an erection”!) 13/20
6 Decathlon: You were reading your text from the script you gave me. “Low coast” was a careless mistake. Your map was in French, and you used French inverted commas. “Independent” (not “…ant”). Your comments on the slides were good, but you made some mistakes with numbers: “fifty-three millions euro” and “zero dot five” (should be 53 million euros/zero point five). What you called “private” brands are usually called “own brands” in English. 14/20
7 Google: You confused “in” and “into” (“into” always involves a verb of motion), as well as “critic” and “criticism” (a critic is a person). You read a lot of your text from the slides and a text, but also made some comments, which was good. “Each” and “every” are singular (so “each/every employee develops”). You didn’t explain the 20% personal time idea very clearly. It wasn’t your fault the video didn’t work properly, but you took a long time to solve the problem. 13/20
8 Gillette: You were reading your text from slides and a script, and it wasn’t always easy to understand. However, your slides were good and you made some good comments on them; also the text was clearly your own work. 14/20
9 Benetton: “Subcontractors” (not “…ants”); “x million dollars” (not “millions dollar”). You had good slides with not too much text, but you were reading your script rather than presenting. It seemed as if you were making a presentation to each other rather than to the class. A person who takes photographs is a photographer. Alternating presenters was a good idea but you hadn’t practised! “Sickness”, not “seakness” (where did you get that from?) 13/20
10 Red Bull: Good effective start; you had the information in your heads, although there was some reading of slides. “Brand”, not “mark”. Good teamwork (although you got lost occasionally). A well-prepared presentation. 15/20